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Brianaface
11/15/2005 11:39:00 PM
I look at my enemy
Staring her straight in the eyes
Watching her ready her weapon
As her tongue spouts more lies

The battle continues
And I maintain my stance
Her words harsher
As they pierce me with every chance

My shield starts to weaken
And the fear multiplies
And bitter words turn not to ashes
But to truth in my eyes

My resistance becomes weak
And my position unsteady
Her insults ammunition
For her attack that is ready

Every inch of me wants to surrender
Making it so much harder to fight
Knowing that giving in would be wrong
But not knowing what would be right

I stare at my victor
Still trying to hold strong
Barley carrying the battle
That had been carried for so long

I raise my hands
To acknowledge defeat
Ashamed at myself
For being so easily beat

My eyes fill with tears
And I look up to see
My reflection in the mirror
As my enemy is me

alixzander
11/16/2005 11:23:00 AM
"Grabbed hold my enemy's neck
and choked 'till he ceased
Blistered with disbelief I awake dead
And when I awoke I couldn't believe it was me
All the time it was me"

This poem reminded me of that song my project 86. i personally didn't like how you used the image of a girl as your enemy.
Brianaface
11/16/2005 5:34:00 PM
Well it is about me fighting myself. That in retrospect I am my own worst enemy.... and I am a girl so....
The Surfing Alien
11/18/2005 3:03:00 AM
well that changes everything, well done
alixzander
11/18/2005 11:08:00 AM
Originally posted by: ¾ÇÖRÊ

Well it is about me fighting myself. That in retrospect I am my own worst enemy.... and I am a girl so....


It's totally fine. I just tend to be a bit overly sensitive to the gender issue.
The Surfing Alien
11/18/2005 4:06:00 PM
you are a goofy fucker arent you....
alixzander
11/18/2005 4:13:00 PM
Originally posted by: The Surfing Alien

you are a goofy fucker arent you....


um...yes?