since we're all rehashing our old style. 8 replies, 8491 views

heartless bitch
7/27/2006 12:07:00 PM
Forever and day, weeping hearts and bleeding pens,
Understated cliches seem very near perfect for my
Current conundrum, my personal purgatory, my hope that
Karma is an urban legend.

Young and beautiful and reckless and shamed and
Overimaginative... if these are my biggest problems, i daresay that i'm coming
Up with a victory in the end.
Remember when i thought you were exactly what i wanted? i

Didn't know that you were exactly twenty things at once.
Indecisive and inconclusive and insensitive and irresistable and
Selfish and surprising and sweet and superficial and
Terrifying and tactless and troubling and tantalizing and touchable and tasty and oh...
Rewind. i'm angry still. or am i? yes.
Artificial. advanced. affable. adorable. angelic. aching.
Cut to present. nothing i think of you can be justified, whether good or bad.
Thinking about you as much as i do can't be justified, whether bad or worse.
I wish that you could feel exactly what i feel right now, not to read it
Or know it, because that wouldn't be enough. i want you to implode,
Not to just hear my voice say it so you can tune me out.

I've washed my hands of us before, but nothing stains one's

Hands quite like a pleasure trail, wouldn't you agree? and
As for me and my peculiarly sized frame, we'll know the truth for now.
Vanities aside, you're still the one with the stronger bones and shoulders. and don't
Ever think you could carry the burden that i do. and as for me and

My peculiarly wired mind, we will try and fail to figure you out, try and fail to hate
You, try and fail to capture your wits and senses the same manner in which you've captured mine.

Once upon a time, my purity was done away with and my honesty skewed.
Whatever happens, you'll always be my chronic illness. my
Newest fear, my most recent revelation. my reason for gluttony.






go to town, kiddos, and let the bloodbath begin.



XmisanthropistX
7/27/2006 3:16:00 PM
remember the freestyle rap battles on here?
heartless bitch
7/28/2006 1:08:00 AM
oh my jesus god. those were pretty badass, though. really, REALLY badass.
heartless bitch
7/28/2006 1:10:00 AM
bizzumpadunk.

if ya'll motherfucking, pussyfooting pansies are going to bitch and moan about my "mean, heartless comments", this was your goddamn fucking chance to go to town with your intelluctual and literary dominance. being that you passed the chance, SHUT YOUR DAMN PIE HOLES.
Eric Paradox
7/28/2006 1:20:00 AM
I put ya ass in the slammer
shove my dick in like a jackhammer
golden showers like summer rain
you'll find a new world'a pain
spin around
watch your neck
my hand'sa stop the air flow
like a broken Oreck
this ain't the end bitch
the battle's just begun
your ass be sore before the web is spun
your mind is in the gutter but your body's in tha ditch
I'm way rusty at this, fool.
heartless bitch
7/28/2006 1:55:00 AM
this was never my game, boy. when XarmageddonX (whom we all remember as Bobby Mass) wakes up, he's going to own you. so on his behalf, rather than mine, i say BRING IT.
XmisanthropistX
7/28/2006 8:35:00 AM
Originally posted by:Eric Paradox

I put ya ass in the slammer
shove my dick in like a jackhammer
golden showers like summer rain
you'll find a new world'a pain
spin around
watch your neck
my hand'sa stop the air flow
like a broken Oreck
this ain't the end bitch
the battle's just begun
your ass be sore before the web is spun
your mind is in the gutter but your body's in tha ditch
I'm way rusty at this, fool.

this is great.
doc holliday
7/28/2006 11:19:00 AM
ok heartless bitch, I liked your intentions of your poem. alot of it was really good, and very revealing. very..honesty, and whether you or anyone else in ehre agrees, i think true honesty in writing is not just hard to do, but hard to truly express. alot of writing is sometimes forced or cliche, and this avoided that for the most part.

however, you give off the feeling that you wrote this with a cigarette and a dictionary in front of your computer. it seems too fast and a little shaky. meaning, you didnt really think it out too much, and its kinda rambling...like I'm doing now. I suggest not just trimming it down, but rewording it. I like most of the beginning, but you lost me after the second stanza.

anyways, overall, pretty good.
heartless bitch
7/28/2006 7:02:00 PM
fair enough, korver.

i'll keep that in mind.

thanks, man.